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素材积累之读后续写——主题：勇斗儿童拐卖贩 第二节（满分25分） 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。 On a Saturday afternoon in Wichita Falls, Texas, three kids talked and laughed happily as they took turns riding a scooter (滑板车) on their quiet street. 11-year-old TJ Smith had just jumped off the scooter as his neighbors Kim, age 7, claimed her turn, and Julie, 9, looked on. Ten minutes later, Kim sat down on the scooter to catch her breath. That was when a bearded man with a head of messy hair appeared. The kids didn’t see where he came from, but they saw exactly what happened next: Without saying a word, the man picked Kim up off the scooter and calmly stepped away. The guy held Kim gently like a baby and just walked down the street. In fact, the calm way the man behaved led TJ to believe that he must be a relative of Kim's. But something wasn’t right. “I could see Kim's face,” TJ said. “She was scared. As the man walked on, Kim's fear transformed into weeps, and then she cried for help. She began kicking and moving, trying to get free of the man's control. “What are you doing?" Julie shouted. But the man, undisturbed, just walked the length of the block until he reached an alley (小巷) and disappeared. TJ was frightened, yet he never thought about the danger to himself. The only thing he wanted to do was to get Kim back. But what was a 4-foot-tall kid going to do to stop a grown man? “I wanted to help, but I couldn’t do it myself,” he thought to himself. “Tell Kim’s parents, Julie!” He shouted as he started running towards the alley. Kim’s parents were relaxing on the sofa in their living room when their front door burst open. Paragraph 1: “A bad guy just picked Kim up and took her away!” yelled Julie. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2: At that very moment. Kim’s parents arrived. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ 【文本材料解读】 通过阅读所给文章可知，11岁的TJ,7岁的Kim和9岁的Julie在安静的街道玩滑板车，其中一个小孩Kim被一个满头蓬乱长胡子的男人抓走了，TJ果断指挥Julie去告知Kim的父母，而自己则朝着小巷去堵截坏人试图营救Kim,故事由此开始需要续写。学生需要根据续写部分的两个首句来进行情节的构思。 【解题思路点拨】 从第一段首句Paragraph 1: “A bad guy just picked Kim up and took her away!” yelled Julie.可知Julie跑去告知Kim的父母Kim被坏人抓走的情况。再根据第二段首句Paragraph 2: At that very moment. Kim’s parents arrived.综合研判可知，在Julie去告知Kim父母之后，Kim的父母应该会表现得异常紧张，并且在Julie的指引下立即出发去解救Kim，而第二段的开头写到在关键的时刻Kim的父母到了，再结合前文TJ的果断指挥可以推知，TJ在Julie前去通知Kim父母的时候去寻找抢走Kim的那个男人，并且与该男人形成了对峙，但是孩子毕竟弱小，显然落了下风，关键的时候Kim的父母正好及时赶到，Kim的父母赶到以后，我们可以设计为将坏人制服，并且报警将坏人绳之于法，辛亏TJ的机智勇敢才让Kim得以救助。 【参考答案】 One possible version: “A bad guy just picked Kim up and took her away!” yelled Julie. So shocked were Kim’s parents that they jumped up from the sofa and rushed over to Julie. Learning what had happened, they phoned the police without delay. The next moment, they jumped into their car and drove off directed by Julie. By then, TJ had reached the alley, but the man was nowhere to be seen. “I must find Kim”, TJ said to himself. He ran along the alley to the end, where he spotted the man walking towards a white house. “Stop! Stop!” With these words, he charged at the guy fearlessly and held fast to (紧紧抓住) Kim. However hard the guy tried to get rid of TJ, TJ wouldn’t give in.At that very moment Kim’s parents arrived. “Help! Help!” TJ shouted. Immediately Kim’s father took off toward the guy. Seeing this, the guy hurriedly let go of Kim and broke into a run (撒腿就跑). Kim’s father dashed up, caught hold of him and pressed him to the ground. Kim ran crying into her mother’s arms. Minutes later, the police arrived and arrested the guy.TJ breathed a sigh of relief and smiled happily. TJ’s quick thinking and bravery saved a little girl in the neighborhood from unimaginable consequences. 【习作点评】 本文描写故事完整，逻辑合理。续写文与前文做到了内容上的衔接。 So shocked were Kim’s parents that….(倒装结构)运用了较为丰富的句式和语法结构：（1）（2）Learning what had happened, they phoned….（现在分词作状语）（3）…, they jumped into the car drove off directed by Julie(过去分词作状语)（4）He ran along the alley to the end, where he spotted the man walking towards a white house(定语从句) 动作描写较为生动：jumped up from the sofa; rushed over to Julie; jumped into their car; drove off; ran along the alley; charged at the guy; held fast to Kim; took off toward the guy; hurriedly let go of; broke into a run; dashed up; caught hold of; pressed him to the ground; ran crying into her mother’s arms; breathed a sigh of relief. 本文来源：https://www.wddqw.com/doc/2d069334a717866fb84ae45c3b3567ec102ddc3c.html